In most elementary and high schools in Asia, students are required to wear uniforms. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing school uniforms?

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people argue that the same dress code is necessary for Asia schools. There are several pros and cons. Both aspects are explained in the ensuing paragraph. Discussing the advantages, the most common one is removing the difference between rich and poor children.
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is because every student comes to class in the same
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no competition or discussion about the dress. The other plus point is that students
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found easily outside
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the school gate.
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, if any child bunk the class peon knows that the student doesn't take the wrong action.
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, parents are buying uniforms at cheaper rates from
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. The mentioned advantages have some disadvantages too. The foremost effect is seen on children because they are bored
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wearing the same
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in their daily routine. The other repercussion is
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organizations
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provide the same size of costume for everyone some children wear uncomfortable dresses because some are fat and some are thin. You will order a special one for yourself. It takes a long time
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can not be fitted perfectly to your body.
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, sometimes people follow
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culture
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they dislike
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true.
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the topic, it can be
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commented that
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is necessary for high school and has good effects. We should try to once a day
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organise some fancy dress competitions so students enjoy their childhood days.
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situation same as a coin, every coin has two sides.

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