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Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, explain why you have moved describe the new house invite your friend to come and visit Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Darshit, How are you? I saw your post on LinkedIn about the promotion. Congratulations! I know you worked tirelessly for
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 job and you deserve it. I am writing
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 letter to invite you to my new
apartment
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. Remember I told you about moving to a different
apartment
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? I
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 saw an
avaibility
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availability
 for an
apartment
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 near downtown, and I took it! As you know, my old
apartment
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 was in a historic building, which didn’t have all the necessary amenities. I used to wash my dishes
with
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by
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hand
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my hand
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, as there was no
dish washer
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dishwasher
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. There was no elevator and I had to climb 4 floors
everytime
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 I wanted to go out. I got fed up with that house and decided to move. The new place is in
a
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close proximity to the Indian grocery store, so I don’t have to travel 20 miles to get my ration. It is
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 just two blocks away from the community
center
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, Can you believe that?
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 unit has two bedrooms and a big living room. It
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 has all the basic amenities,
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 as a dishwasher, a gas stove and air conditioning. It
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 has a bar counter, so we can have a drink or two.
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, it has a patio, where we can sit and talk about life! I know you have some vacation time remaining
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 year, so I wanted to invite you over for my housewarming party on December 25, 2022. I can’t wait to see you
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 friend! Best Regards, Vimal Thakkar
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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