Some feel that individuals should try to assimilate completely to the country where they live while others feel it is more important to preserve their native culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Culture

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plays an essential role in people’s life

as well as

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their

behavior

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. It goes without saying that destination

culture

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would be effective on the emigrants,

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, they have their own

culture

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, too. Many have argued that incorporating

culture

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into

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emigrants’

life

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lives

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lead

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leads

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many

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benefits,

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in some cases, it causes

culture

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shock or

lost

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. Both sides are logical and have reasonable perspectives. Personally, I agree with both sides

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and more with cultural development. From a conserving

culture

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standpoint, conforming

the

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to the

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heritage

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the next

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generation

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responsibility,

which

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they have to preserve their descendant’s

culture

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. In terms of

essentiality

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the essentiality

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of protecting, every

culture

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contains lots of history and beliefs, and ignoring and paying no attention

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that

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leads

disappearing

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all

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those magnificent mythologies.

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, there

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numerous languages in the world,

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, nowadays, it has been decreasing.

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, cultural development would be informed by emigrants, in which the majority part of it belongs to

travelers

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and immigrants .

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, having an insight

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into

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the

heritage

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such

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languages and ceremonies, benefits

to communicate

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communicating

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with citizens and

prevent

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prevents

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to be

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segregated

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segregation

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and

isolated

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. Most importantly, identifying specific local

belief

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beliefs

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would stop prejudice.

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, in America cousin marriage is culturally unacceptable, but it is vice versa in Iran.

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, preservation of the history and

heritage

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is a public duty.

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, there is no harm in multiculture, and there are

diversity

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diverse

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cultures in the world

and

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not to mention

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that all transfer to others.

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, by taking

account

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into account

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their

heritage

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, it would be pleased to have their cultural ritual

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yours.

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Task Achievement

Make sure your introduction sets a clear framework for the discussion, introducing both sides of the argument and stating your opinion.

Task Achievement

Develop your ideas fully with clear explanations or arguments to support them, and provide more specific examples to illustrate your points.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on the logical flow of your essay by using a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively.

General

Pay attention to grammar and punctuation to ensure clarity and precision in your writing.

Task Achievement

Expand your conclusion to summarise both views and restate your opinion more emphatically.

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2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

269 words

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