A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team, summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts, say how you think the company should spend the money.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter with regard to giving the feedback to you which you want from the general public to choose from either to sponsor a local children's
sports
team
for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. The merits of providing financial support to
sports
teams will help to boost the
sports
spirit of each player in the
team
. Apart from that, the coach will be having enough amount of money to buy any new equipment needed for the player and because of
this
players of the
team
might play in the country's
team
in future.
Consequently
, there are benefits too of paying for the concerts
such
as people will get entertainment by watching stage performances. Apart from that, people would have a great chance to socialize with numerous
persons
Replace the word
people
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.
Moreover
, individuals can
also
try various types of cuisines from different stalls present at the concert. I think your company should spend the money on local children's
sports
teams owing to the fact that it can be beneficial for the nation. Some players might play in the Olympics to represent the country. Looking forward to a positive and prompt response. Yours sincerely, Shah Harshil
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