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University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the Internet for students to read and show the importance of attending face-to-face lectures has been reduced. Do you believe the use of the Internet in formal education is a good idea? What future effects will the Internet have on economic study?

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Nowadays, due to the improvement of technology,
students
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instead
 of going to school. In the following essay, I will explain why I believe it is not a good idea to
study
on-line
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 and
also
 some influences on
economic
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study
. In my opinion, though it is
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 convenient and cheaper way to
study
 on the internet.
However
, there are some drawbacks that outweigh the benefits.
Firstly
, formal education is better to teach face-to-face. The reason is that there are more interactions between teachers and
students
 in the
physical
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 courses.
By asking
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 and answering teachers’ questions will help children to build their confidence and
also
 courage.
Furthermore
, the
students
 need to expand their own social interactions.
For example
, they can play with their peers and train their teamwork skills
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.
Nevertheless
, if they learn on the internet, they don’t have a chance to spend time with their classmates and will be isolated eventually. When it comes to the impacts on
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study
 in the future, if people tend to transfer physical classes
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 online ones, the cost will be reduced not only for parents but
also
 schools.
The distance
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 learnings are much cheaper than
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physical ones. For parents, the tuition fee will be less expensive and can save
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transportation expenses and that will really reduce their financial pressure. As for the schools, because they don’t need to provide spaces and classrooms to
students
, they can save a lot of rents and maintenance fees. In conclusion, there do have many economic benefits
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 improving online courses, whereas the cons might exceed the pros for the
students
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