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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that the usage of artificial intelligence will change our future and have
positive
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 impact on
people
's lives
also
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and also
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 change the whole
sinario
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scenario
 of our thinking
abilitiy
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ability
abilities
. It is
large
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 extent
to
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apply
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agree with
this
 prompt apart from
i
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 will
also
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people
's
opinion
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opinions
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 as well.
To begin
 with,
IT
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the IT
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 sector is a growing part of
future
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the future
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 generation day to day
life style
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lifestyle
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.
First
 of all, it
give
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work
 opportunities to new employees and
open
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 door for them. Now each and every
field
 need artificial intelligence in their department, so more
and
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people
 have profit who want to make their career in
this
field
. Moving ahead,
this
make
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 every
work
 a piece of cake for everyone
however
 it
need
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 special knowledge of
this
field
 as well as
work
 experience.
In addition
of
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this
, with the help of
it
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its
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 research
work
 drastic changes,
moreover
,
people
 are more aware now than past.
Likewise
, in
the
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agricultural
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 individuals take
help
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the help
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 of
satelites
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satellites
 to
knowing
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 about
weather
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the weather
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. In future, it
also
many
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have many
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 positive
impact
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impacts
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 on
humans
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human
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 lives.
However
, it has some
drawback
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drawbacks
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 as well not only
make
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making
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human
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humans
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lathargic
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lethargic
 but
also
change
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 their mindset and the think
out
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 of
box
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. And they do not follow the old way of working and their values.
Thereafter
, everyone will make their career in
this
field
 and it
increase
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cut throat
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 competition and make
sendatry
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secondary
 lifestyle of
people
. In a nutshell,
although
 artificial intelligence has many positive
effect
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effects
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 on
humans
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 lives but
do
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 not
over look
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overlook
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the
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others
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prospective
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perspective
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 as well.
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