Parents should control children behaviour but some says they shouldnot be controlled. Write both the viewes and give you opinion.

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have responsibilities to take care of their children and give them good values. some people think that guardian should control their behaviour,

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, others feel that it is not to control them. In upcoming

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will discuss both these views and give

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appropriate conclusion. It certainly cannot

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that

parents

are nurturing their offspring and

prevent

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them

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doing any negative behaviour. It is their duty to guide them and tell them about all aspects of

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and every stage of

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their

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because they have lots of experience in their

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that they utilize in their children's

life

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them social values but

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give them other knowledge as well.

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is the

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teacher of every child so they have the ability to make some boundaries for them.

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children it appears that

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jail whenever

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showed extra restrictions on them. It has

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impact on their grooming and

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them negative. Moving

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, it has more negative impact than positive. In a nutshell,

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are responsible for their grooming so they have the right to prevent them when they do any wrong things in their

life

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

252 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Parents should control children behaviour but some says they shouldnot be controlled. Write both the viewes and give you opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Because some children do not seem to have natural ability to learn other languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or same conditions of work for life. Discuss the possible causes for this change and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work in the future.