Parents should control children behaviour but some says they shouldnot be controlled. Write both the viewes and give you opinion.

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Parents
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have responsibilities to take care of their children and give them good values. some people think that guardian should control their behaviour,
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, others feel that it is not to control them. In upcoming
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will discuss both these views and give
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appropriate conclusion. It certainly cannot
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that
parents
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are nurturing their offspring and
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them
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doing any negative behaviour. It is their duty to guide them and tell them about all aspects of
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. If they need their help so they assist them and make
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bond
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and every stage of
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adults
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to
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their
parents
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to give them
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because they have lots of experience in their
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that they utilize in their children's
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.
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to
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,
guardian
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not only
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them social values but
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give them other knowledge as well.
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,
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is the
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teacher of every child so they have the ability to make some boundaries for them.
On the other hand
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, some people think that it is
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to
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children it appears that
parents
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make their
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according to themselves. They feel like they live in
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jail whenever
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parents
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showed extra restrictions on them. It has
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impact on their grooming and
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make
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them negative. Moving
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, it has more negative impact than positive. In a nutshell,
parents
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are responsible for their grooming so they have the right to prevent them when they do any wrong things in their
life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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