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The chart displays the ratio between households in owned and rented
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 during the period between 1918 and 2011 years in England and Wales. As can be seen on the displayed chart, during almost the whole considered period of time, the value of households renting
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 was decreasing in comparison with ones owning houses. The highest percentage of
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 index was observed in 1918. The minimum value was in 2001. The situation is the opposite for families who own houses. During the considered years, their index was increasing. The minimum value was in 1918
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 was achieved in 2001. Summing up the data displayed in the chat, it can be seen that the dynamic of both values ​​is opposite to each other. Only in 1971 their indexes were on the same level and were 50
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. Before
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 moment, the percentage of households renting
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 was higher than the ones owning
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.
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 moment, the situation changed in the opposite way.
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