An average British child watches television for more than 20 hours in a week and indulge in 7 hours of physical activity. What is the situation in your country and what are the causes of it? What are the solution to overcome the same?

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, many
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, if parents start using parental screen controls,
children
will devote their time towards outdoor sports. Similar to western
children
, many young
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spend on their
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usage
. smart televisions entertainment,
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,
education
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. To prove my point, shows producers hire
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physiologist
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. hard to
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parental screen control.
children
can use Television it set
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allow
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children
utlize
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utilise
television for everything, but for a limited time.
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regulation will only allow educational channels and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • physical activity
  • proliferation
  • digital devices
  • social media influence
  • indoor entertainment
  • educational pressures
  • safety concerns
  • structured physical education
  • community safety
  • government initiatives
  • sports infrastructure
  • community events
  • overall well-being
  • balance
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