Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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personal deficiency, but
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some others view that it is
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decision to try and progress, that circumstance. I completely
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the latter proposition and will discuss
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with the
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my view.
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people
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they should satisfy their achievement,
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, there will not suffer mentally
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dissatisfaction.
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memorize
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time
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types
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of job where humans have to recall
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time
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, it is difficult to get
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job
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time
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situation
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, because most of the
time
need
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to get in
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entail
satisfactory work meanwhile, they have to wait
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time
.
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, most
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the successful
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people
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did not reach
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first
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,
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favourite after playing 5 years simple club,
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of
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to progress that situation.
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the
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people
succeed in their life,
to work
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hard and without struggle tough to overcome any situation.
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entails
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desire
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score
first
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time
, but after
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lot
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of
time
they get
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target scores. in conclusion, it is obvious that maximum
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try for success
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several
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,
however
, I
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requested
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my opinion again and proved.
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  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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