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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations
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some others view that it is
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 decision to try and progress, that circumstance. I completely
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they should satisfy their achievement,
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people
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 of job where humans have to recall
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, it is difficult to get
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situation
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, because most of the
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 to get in
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 satisfactory work meanwhile, they have to wait
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.
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, most
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the successful
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, there are many
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 of
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 to progress that situation.
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people
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to work
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desire
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first
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 of
time
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people
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try for success
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several
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,
however
, I
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requested
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