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Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#workplace #countries #outweigh
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In the
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 given diagram is presented information about instant
noodles
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 manufacturing. Overall, the manufacture of
noodles
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 begins
from
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with
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 delivering
flour
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 towards storage silours by track and finishes with
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the labeling
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labeling
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labelling
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 of containers and sealing the noodle. The manufacture of
noodles
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 begins with delivering
flour
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 to storage
silors
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sailors
 by track.
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Second
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 stage happens in the factory, where
flour
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 is mixed with water and oil in the mixer.
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, oil,
flour
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 and water are converted to
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 sheets by rollers. Afterwards
dough
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 sheets are cut into
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dough
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 strips. Another stage is converting
dough
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 strips to noodle discs,
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 they are cooked using oil and dried to illuminate water from the
noodles
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.
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 dried
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 are packaged in cups with adding vegetables and spices.
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Finally
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 cups of
noodles
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 are
labeled
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 in containers and sealed.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • workplace
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • mentor
  • colleagues
  • innovation
  • stagnation
  • traditional methods
  • recent graduates
  • theoretical knowledge
  • diversity
  • viewpoints
  • proven ability
  • stability
  • industries
  • technology
  • adaptation
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