An average British child watches television for more than 20 hours in a week and indulge in 7 hours of physical activity. What is the situation in your country and what are the causes of it? What are the solution to overcome the same?

Nowadays the situation is nearly the same in each country over the globe, children keep watching television for a long time rather than
practicing
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activities,
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has become a negative phenomenon. In
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I am going to discuss the possible causes and solutions to
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problem.
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, with the situation in my homeland, children prefer to stay at home watching these channels that show kids' programs, even if they are outside
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they use these gadgets to watch live
vidoes
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videos
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on YouTube channels or on any other application.
As a
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they left small time to practice any physical activity and sometimes they do not practice at all.
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in my neighbourhood the sports clubs are almost empty
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youngers
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,
however
, the
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government built these places, especially for them. To get close to the possible causes, we live now in a different era , in the
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my generation used to play on the streets,
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even though
we had the same kids' program on television.
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the
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lifestyle
of people is changed, the parents tend to stay at home
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social media and mobile phones
instead
of visiting sports clubs or public gardens.
Therefore
to solve
this
issue we should urge guardians to
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a huge
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amount
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of time for physical activity
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their offspring.
Moreover
, the media and social organisations should support
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this
matter.
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in developed
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countries
countires
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countries
like
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Sports Ministry motivates youngers with gifts to participate in run marathons. To sum up, we should consider
this
issue by understanding the causes, being aware of the consequences, and getting serious solutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • physical activity
  • proliferation
  • digital devices
  • social media influence
  • indoor entertainment
  • educational pressures
  • safety concerns
  • structured physical education
  • community safety
  • government initiatives
  • sports infrastructure
  • community events
  • overall well-being
  • balance
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