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It is common these days to see celebrities advertising different products? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#celebrities #products #outweigh
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The world that we live in today is dominated by advertising.
People
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 are exposed to
advertisements
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 and they cannot escape from advertising. Owner of
brands
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 and product creators show their productions or items in
advertisements
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 with several
celebrities
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 because of beneficial reasons.
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, in some cases, the same
celebrity
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 advertises various
products
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.
This
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 situation has both benefits and drawbacks. To commence with, the main adverse side of advertising different
products
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 by the same
celebrity
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 is that
people
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 cannot trust that reliable of supported and boosted
products
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. Because,
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, if a
celebrity
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 plays
advertisements
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 for two diverse textile
brands
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, the public thinks that fame enhances both two
brands
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 in order to gain money.
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,
people
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 cannot decide where they buy clothes from.
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, the prestige of the
celebrity
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 may be damaged by the public.
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, even if the
celebrity
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 is seen in
advertisements
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 of another category,
people
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 cannot consider him/her because they used to see him/her in many
advertisements
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.
On the other hand
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, there is a positive impact on
celebrities
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.
The
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celebrity
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 who has the responsibility
for
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 being the face of several
brands
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 have been more popular and can gain much more money thanks to advertising. It is accepted that there is neither good advertising nor bad advertising.
Celebrities
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 not only advertise the
products
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 but
also
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 advertise themselves to the public or authorities. In conclusion, it is seen that
celebrities
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 advertise various
brands
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 because of several beneficial results.
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, it should not be ignored that
this
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 situation has dreadful effects. In my opinion, I strongly believe that its disadvantages outweigh its advantages.
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