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People in community now could buy cheaper consumer goods. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #community #consumer #goods
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In
this
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 contemporary era, it is believed by many that
people
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 in the community could purchase
products
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 at low-cost.
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, I strongly opine that the merits are more than the demerits and will discuss the reasons in the below paragraphs. There are several benefits to buying
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 at a lower
price
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.
To begin
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 with, massive production is the only way where a company can produce goods at a cheaper
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hence
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 organizations need employees for conducting production in the factories which reduces unemployment in the nation.
Secondly
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,
people
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 always want a better
quality
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 product at a lower cost which enhances the pressure on businesses and retailers as they have to be competitive and keep innovating their
products
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 to become stable in
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 cut-throat competition. Lower-income class
people
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 can be benefitted from
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 trend as it helps them to purchase good and innovative
products
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 at low-
price
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, so they can save their hard-earned money.
On the other hand
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, there are various disadvantages to buying goods at a cheaper
price
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. Manufacturers have started using substitutes of raw materials which could be low in
quality
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 and produce degraded
products
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. These
products
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 are harmful to users. A lower
price
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 creates a high demand for the product which leads to inflation, the government should impose laws and rules for stabilizing the prices in the market.
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, the government should ask authorities to check the
quality
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 of the product so that
people
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 can use good
quality
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products
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. To conclude, I believe that, cheaper goods bring huge competition among businesses which is useful to the common
people
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.
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, with the intervention of the
government
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 we can control the
quality
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 and the
price
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 of the
products
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.
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