Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that professional
athletes
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can make more
money
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than
than
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other
jobs
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.
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some
people
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think it is not fair, others state
this
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is right.
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it seems like, it is very easy what sports professionals do, they adjust their whole life
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their occupation. On
one
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hand,
one
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highlights that
athletes
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have more income than
the
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other
jobs
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and
one
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says it is a situation which is not deserved. It sounds fully
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, you just play a game and you get millions of
dolars
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dollars
, leading to
people
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consider
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considering
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this
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amount of
money
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is not fair.
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,
business men
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businessmen
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graduated
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graduate
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a
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high-level university and
working
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hardly
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,
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, at the end of the day Messi who is the greatest of all time
football
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in football
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player,
earn
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earns
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money
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,which
business men
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make in a year, in a match. To sum up,
people
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claim that there is no right balance between
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athletes
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athletes'
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and other
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jobs
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jobs'
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incomes.
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, when
public
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the public
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watch
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a
sport
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game, they just see the
athletes
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one
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hour of their lives, yet professionals dedicate their whole life
for
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a just
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one hour
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performance. They everyday get up early, practice twice a day, and eat
healty
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healthy
food not what they want to eat.
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, even they sacrifice seeing their families, leading to
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very
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low possibility to manage their mental health.
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, Stephen Curry who is the best shooter in
NBA
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league has a tight diet and
practice
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practices
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three times
in
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a day. In an interview he said, ı could not see my daughter for two weeks before the
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final match so
ıt
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it
was worse than training all night.
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, being a professional is not piece of cake as other see. In conclusion, whether successful
athlete
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athletes
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earn
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more
money
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than other
jobs
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is fair or not remains a controversial issue.
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people
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supposed being a football or basketball player is simple,
ıt
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it
was
difficult
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in terms of mental and physical health than they thought. I strongly believe that society must be
respectfull
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respectful
to
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athletes
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athletes'
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incomes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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