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Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Compare them and use specific reasons and examples.

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Nowadays, many people like to have a trip to various countries and cities during their holidays.
However
, they may prefer different ways to
travel
. Some
travelers
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 prefer going on their own, while others think joining the group tour or going with their friends and families. It is claimed that
travel
 by oneself can be very challenging and open one’s mind. The reason is that
travelers
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travellers
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 who
travel
 alone cannot rely on
your
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their
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 companions but only
themselves
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on themselves
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.
Thus
, they can learn how to deal with
the
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problems and improve their independent skills.
Furthermore
, people do not need to listen to
your
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their
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 companions’ opinions. They can decide
the
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on the
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 places and schedule whatever they want.
This
 means people will not force to go somewhere or do some activities that they don’t feel attractive.
In
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On
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 the other hand,
traveling
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travelling
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 in
group
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the group
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 has a totally different experience than that
of
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apply
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independent
travel
.
Firstly
, the visitors might feel really unsafe
especially
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 in
the
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unfamiliar areas without their friends’ company.
Besides
, if someone meets some difficulties, he or she can turn to their friends for help.
In addition
,
traveling
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travelling
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 with one’s family can help
bounding
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to bound
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 their relationship. Doing activities together will enhance their connection. In conclusion,
whether
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apply
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going on vacation alone or in
group
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the group
a group
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 is a good choice. It only depends on the person’s
need
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needs
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.
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