Many people argue that eating junk food has led to an unhealthy lifestyle. This problem has become more common among young people these days. Do you agree or disagree that junk food is the cause of the issue?

There are many
people
who think that the main cause of unhealthy
lifestyle
is
people
’s tendency to consume fast
food
, especially young
people
.
Although
junk
food
is partly responsible for
this
problem, in my
opinion
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there are some other reasons which are leading to
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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way of life. I admit that fast
food
is considered to be one of the main causes of leading
unhealthy
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lifestyle
. It consists of excessive fats and calories which are difficult to digest and harmful
for
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the organism
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organism
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.
Also
, it is served with fizzy drinks containing excessive amounts of sugar which can lead to weight gain.
People
will not get enough nutrients that an average body requires when they replace healthy
food
such
as
home-made
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soups and salads with fast
food
. Because home-prepared meals tend to be rich in vitamins necessary for the body, and not getting enough may be damaging to the body. In my view,
however
, there are some other important reasons for
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. One of them is less exercise. Due to the advancements in technology
people
move less than they did in the past: cars have replaced walking, machines do the laundry for
people
, lifts carry them as they feel too busy to take stairs, etc. These changes have led to
sedentary
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lifestyle
which has become a very common problem today.
Moreover
,
people
are getting insufficient sleep. They are overloading themselves with tasks to make their day more productive, but it is having adverse effects on
people
’s health. The harms of sleep deprivation are much
serious
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than they are considered to be. In conclusion, even though fast
food
is one of the causes of
inappropriate
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lifestyle
, I believe that there are two more serious reasons
such
as sleep deprivation and lack of exercise.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary habits
  • self-control
  • advertising
  • appealing
  • convenience culture
  • fast food
  • obesity rates
  • nutritional education
  • affordability
  • psychological effects
  • well-being
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