Animals are becoming exist due to human activities on land and in sea. Why has this happen? What’s the solution?
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threat Correct article usage
a huge
for
aquatic and terrestrial Change preposition
to
animals
increasing their extinction on the planet. This
essay will analyse major
causes of it and state possible solutions for Correct article usage
the major
this
phenomenon .
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are
is
the issue Change the verb form
are
from
marine debris, habitat Change preposition
of
lost
, poaching and food chain Replace the word
loss
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disruption
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disruption
distruption
. Correct your spelling
disruption
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, there are landfills to burn the waste , in some countries
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,countries
people
throw them away on
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in
ocean
menacing the Correct article usage
the ocean
lifes
of marine Correct your spelling
lives
life
animals
. For example
, a study showed that certain seabirds eat plastic bags and go to warn that the bird population are at risk of dying out (this
scientifically
proven). Add a missing verb
is scientifically
Besides
, logging has endangered many animals
throughout the world and lead
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led
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the lost
lost
of habitat. Many Replace the word
loss
forestes
in Eastern Europe Correct your spelling
forests
destroyed
by Add a missing verb
were destroyed
tree cutting
machines which caused deforestation. Add a hyphen
tree-cutting
Furthermore
, people
's violent entertainment activities in other words
blood sport
like Fix the agreement mistake
sports
kiling
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killing
animals
for pleasure widespread. For
example
elephant poaching become popular since some parts of their body is valuable and they are becoming extinct Add a comma
,example
especially
in India. Another striking point is that as above mentioned hunting some species illegally and Add the comma(s)
,especially
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the introduction
introduction
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introducing
of
invasive one's Change preposition
apply
also
result in food chain distruption
, which is one of Correct your spelling
disruption
listed
reasons Add an article
the listed
of
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for
dwindling
numbers of Correct article usage
the dwindling
animals
.
There are many principal solutions for this
trend. Firstly
,ceasing to throw away rubbish into the ocean or rivers and rising awareness among citizens not to to
do Remove the redundancy
apply
this
. And imposing a hefty fine to
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on
people
who do not obey it and against this
rule . By implementing a rule to protect animal
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the animal
an animal
right
, Fix the agreement mistake
rights
people
could save many endangered species and boost their number in wildlife again . Moreover
, individuals should stop introduction
of foreign Add an article
the introduction
animals
because they may not adopt living in other countries. For example
, many lizards live in hot countries and people
tried to carry them Uzbekistan
by plane and they died because of low Change preposition
to Uzbekistan
temperature
and unsuited living conditions.
To conclude, we can see that ocean trash , Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
lost
of habitat and hunting illegally alongside food chain Replace the word
loss
Correct your spelling
disruption
distruption
are Correct your spelling
disruption
main
origins of Correct article usage
the main
problem
, and that can be resolved only by human activities like introducing new laws , enforcing to pay a fine and restoring debris on oceansAdd an article
the problem
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