Animals are becoming exist due to human activities on land and in sea. Why has this happen? What’s the solution?

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huge
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threat
for
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aquatic and terrestrial
animals
increasing their extinction on the planet.
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essay will analyse
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causes of it and state possible solutions for
this
phenomenon . Probably the main factors
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is
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the issue
from
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marine debris, habitat
lost
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, poaching and food chain
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disruption
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disruption
distruption
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disruption
.
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, there are landfills to burn the waste , in some
countries
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people
throw them away
on
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ocean
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the ocean
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menacing the
lifes
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lives
life
of marine
animals
.
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, a study showed that certain seabirds eat plastic bags and go to warn that the bird population are at risk of dying out (
this
scientifically
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proven).
Besides
, logging has endangered many
animals
throughout the world and
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to
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lost
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of habitat. Many
forestes
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in Eastern Europe
destroyed
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by
tree cutting
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machines which caused deforestation.
Furthermore
,
people
's violent entertainment activities
in other words
blood
sport
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sports
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like
kiling
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killing
animals
for pleasure widespread.
For
example
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elephant poaching become popular since some parts of their body is valuable and they are becoming extinct
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in India. Another striking point is that as above mentioned hunting some species illegally and
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introduction
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of
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invasive one's
also
result in food chain
distruption
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disruption
, which is one of
listed
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reasons
of
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dwindling
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numbers of
animals
. There are many principal solutions for
this
trend.
Firstly
,ceasing to throw away rubbish into the ocean or rivers and rising awareness among citizens not to
to
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do
this
. And imposing a hefty fine
to
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people
who do not obey it and against
this
rule . By implementing a rule to protect
animal
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the animal
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right
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rights
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,
people
could save many endangered species and boost their number in wildlife again .
Moreover
, individuals should stop
introduction
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the introduction
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of foreign
animals
because they may not adopt living in other countries.
For example
, many lizards live in hot countries and
people
tried to carry them
Uzbekistan
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by plane and they died because of low
temperature
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temperatures
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and unsuited living conditions. To conclude, we can see that ocean trash ,
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of habitat and hunting illegally alongside food chain
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disruption
distruption
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disruption
are
main
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origins of
problem
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the problem
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, and that can be resolved only by human activities like introducing new laws , enforcing to pay a fine and restoring debris on oceans
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