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Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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A number of people believe that almost all educational centres ought to allow their
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 to learn whatever they want
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while
 others think that it is beneficial for them to learn subjects when they are adolescents to achieve a vivid
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 career. From my point of view, children would be able to gain a better educational experience if they start learning from
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 years of their life and
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 to study anything that they want to learn
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 as a chance to improve their special abilities towards certain tasks
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 they might be able to build a better
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 these opportunities can
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 to make a significant amount of money by demonstrating their special abilities through the social media platforms
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society while creating a number of opportunities for youngsters to show their special talent while
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 offering a considerable amount of money.
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, others think that it is much
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 for
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 to choose only useful subjects
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 as mathematics, geography and history that
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, nowadays
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 of the jobs are related to computers
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 there is a big demand for employers who have a wide range of information about mathematics
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 subjects which are
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universities
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, if universities control their
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 by giving
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compulsory
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always
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consistent
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, if they give
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chance to
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 to learn whatever they want some of them may ignore the learning process. To conclude, having weighed everything mentioned up, I can come to the conclusion
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that, it would be much beneficial for children to learn how to enhance their special abilities from
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 years of their life span to achieve
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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