Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

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youths

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and young adults are getting involved in smoking

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is having negative

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on their

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. Some of the problems I feel

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causing

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is peer pressure, addiction and

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because most of these things are cheap and can be easily gotten. I am

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going to suggest some possible

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which I feel if taken, can help in reducing the excess consumption of

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among young

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. The issue of peer pressure in our nation can'

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be ignored. While some

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helped their

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in becoming great, others got them into bad habits like smoking. Most young

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started smoking because of their

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. Some because they want to feel

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in the midst of their

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, they had to join them in smoking so as not to be separated. Most of our

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are now addicted to smoking. Some can'

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even do without smoking

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a day. I came in contact with some young

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and these boys have

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habit that if they don'

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smoke

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, they can'

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eat anything. It's after they had smoked that they will start planning to eat food. Another reason I feel smoking is getting popular among

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because

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these

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products are very cheap to acquire. While some of them are expensive and are only gotten by

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a few

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rich

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, the most consumed tobaccos are cheap and are gotten by most

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who are into smoking. With the rates at which

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young

people

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are smoking

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, I suggest there should be possible

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to decrease

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taking among them and make it unpopular since the

youths

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can'

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be stopped permanently. Among my

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, I will be suggesting

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an open

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talk or seminar which will be strictly directed to smokers. If the government and

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the

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organizations can come together or individually to organize public

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serminarsthat

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seminars that

will be directed to smokers, it will go a long way in reducing the intake of

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. Most

youths

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keep smoking because they are ignorant about the

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effects

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can cause them.

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they keep seeing the

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on the

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boxes, some actually don'

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know the real

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on their

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. With the public

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talk, they will be shown pictures and videos of those

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tobacco

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smoking has affected.

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there should be free medical tests for

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. Once these

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are

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done, some will discover that their

healths

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are getting affected and it will make most of them

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stop while those that

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about the

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reports of

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smokers will

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be scared to smoke so they

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won'

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suffer

samething

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something

same thing

. As smoking

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is increasing among our

youths

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, which is having bad

effects

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on their

healths

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, the government and the

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organizations and

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concerned individuals should take note of the reasons and possible

solutions

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, so smoking can be reduced among them.

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Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

Fully explain your ideas

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

The length of vacation that employees enjoy each year varies from job to job. Do you think people should have the same number of holidays regardless of their occupation? Explain your answer.

Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying a product (such as a cell phone) or service (medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture. We can learn as much as from books, films and the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?