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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree or disagree?

#universities #amount #money #sport #activities #libraries
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Universities
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nowadays are well-known for providing a lot of
activities
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 and services to their
students
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. In that context, some would say that these educational institutions have to allocate the same amount of money to their
sport
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activities
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 as they allocate to their
libraries
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. In my opinion, both items are crucial in terms of academic life, but I think that
libraries
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 need to be prioritized. The
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 point of view says that the budget spent
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Universities
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 needs to be the same for both physical
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activities
activity
 and book departments.
This
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 statement is based on the importance of sports for academic life and for
students
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 in getting access to updated information and specialized content related to their areas in their institutions. The
students
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 not only have to study, according to that vision, but they need to practice
sport
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activities
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 to take care of their own mental health. As an example, you can find scientific information that illustrates how much body-oriented
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 can improve
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student
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 academic performance.
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, there is an opinion that
libraries
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 need to be prioritized in spite of other services
Universities
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 provide: from bodywork to clubs. Book departments need to be seen as an important part of the learning process of
students
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 and poor
libraries
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 mean less knowledge for both undergraduate and graduate alumni. In my opinion, it is evident that sports provide a very good space for
students
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 in order to relax and have fun, but investing in updated material is something that can not be avoided. In conclusion, I can say that
Universities
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 have a lot of positive
activities
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 for
students
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, in which we can locate body
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 and
libraries
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.
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Universities
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 must put the
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emphasis
 on having good and updated book departments.
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