Some people think international events such as the Olympic Games are important and can bring nations together. Others, however, think that they are a waste of money as the money could be spent elsewhere on more important issues. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Olympic games have been a great part of the sports culture around the world. The games started in Athens with an effort

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the countries together and celebrate sport in a spectacular way.

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some people think

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kind of international event is important, there are others who feel it is a waste of money.

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, we will discuss both the views in following paragraphs and I

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share my personal viewpoint on the same.

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, let's discuss the positives of

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extravaganza across the globe.

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, the Olympic games which are held over a gap of four years in every leap year command massive participation from almost all 190 nations in the world.

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, it brings a sense of unity through healthy competition in sports like athletics, gymnastics and others.

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, the host nation is given a chance to show its hospitality to the whole community.

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, some people believe these occasions are very essential. Alternatively, there are folks who consider them of less importance and the destruction of money.

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, the FIFA

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2022 being held in Qatar has a total expenditure on infrastructure to be around 220 billion dollars and the incoming revenue expected is just 17 billion dollars.

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to the costs, the impact of conducting a huge tournament on the environment is drastic.

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, people are of the opinion that it's a waste of resources which could have been utilized

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for the betterment of society. I would like

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by saying that I don't completely disagree with the statement that these international events are a waste of money

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, there is a need to find a more sustainable way to have them.

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, it would keep the spirit of sports alive and help to maintain harmony on the planet.

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While you have addressed both viewpoints, make sure to provide a stronger opinion in your conclusion and ensure that it aligns with the arguments presented in the body paragraphs.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 7.0

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4 paragraphs

301 words

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