Some people think international events such as the Olympic Games are important and can bring nations together. Others, however, think that they are a waste of money as the money could be spent elsewhere on more important issues. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Olympic games have been a great part of the sports culture around the world. The games started in Athens with an effort
of bringing
the countries together and celebrate sport in a spectacular way. Change preposition
to bring
Although
some people think this
kind of international event is important, there are others who feel it is a waste of money. Therefore
, we will discuss both the views in following paragraphs and I would
share my personal viewpoint on the same.
Wrong verb form
will
Firstly
, let's discuss the positives of such
extravaganza across the globe. For instance
, the Olympic games which are held over a gap of four years in every leap year command massive participation from almost all 190 nations in the world. Furthermore
, it brings a sense of unity through healthy competition in sports like athletics, gymnastics and others. Additionally
, the host nation is given a chance to show its hospitality to the whole community. Hence
, some people believe these occasions are very essential.
Alternatively, there are folks who consider them of less importance and the destruction of money. For example
, the FIFA world cup
2022 being held in Qatar has a total expenditure on infrastructure to be around 220 billion dollars and the incoming revenue expected is just 17 billion dollars. Correct your spelling
World Cup
In addition
to the costs, the impact of conducting a huge tournament on the environment is drastic. Moreover
, people are of the opinion that it's a waste of resources which could have been utilized elsewhere
for the betterment of society.
I would like to conclude
by saying that I don't completely disagree with the statement that these international events are a waste of money instead
, there is a need to find a more sustainable way to have them. Thus
, it would keep the spirit of sports alive and help to maintain harmony on the planet.Submitted by sach2996 on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is clearly focused on the main idea and supports the overall argument effectively.
task response
While you have addressed both viewpoints, make sure to provide a stronger opinion in your conclusion and ensure that it aligns with the arguments presented in the body paragraphs.