Some people think international events such as the Olympic Games are important and can bring nations together. Others, however, think that they are a waste of money as the money could be spent elsewhere on more important issues. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Olympic games have been a great part of the sports culture around the world. The games started in Athens with an effort
of bringing
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the countries together and celebrate sport in a spectacular way.
Although
some people think
this
kind of international event is important, there are others who feel it is a waste of money.
Therefore
, we will discuss both the views in following paragraphs and I
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share my personal viewpoint on the same.
Firstly
, let's discuss the positives of
such
extravaganza across the globe.
For instance
, the Olympic games which are held over a gap of four years in every leap year command massive participation from almost all 190 nations in the world.
Furthermore
, it brings a sense of unity through healthy competition in sports like athletics, gymnastics and others.
Additionally
, the host nation is given a chance to show its hospitality to the whole community.
Hence
, some people believe these occasions are very essential. Alternatively, there are folks who consider them of less importance and the destruction of money.
For example
, the FIFA
world cup
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2022 being held in Qatar has a total expenditure on infrastructure to be around 220 billion dollars and the incoming revenue expected is just 17 billion dollars.
In addition
to the costs, the impact of conducting a huge tournament on the environment is drastic.
Moreover
, people are of the opinion that it's a waste of resources which could have been utilized
elsewhere
for the betterment of society. I would like
to conclude
by saying that I don't completely disagree with the statement that these international events are a waste of money
instead
, there is a need to find a more sustainable way to have them.
Thus
, it would keep the spirit of sports alive and help to maintain harmony on the planet.
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Ensure that each paragraph is clearly focused on the main idea and supports the overall argument effectively.
task response
While you have addressed both viewpoints, make sure to provide a stronger opinion in your conclusion and ensure that it aligns with the arguments presented in the body paragraphs.
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