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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
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current
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 world,
environment
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environmental
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 protection is very important. There is
belief
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the belief
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 that society can do anything to protect
the
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apply
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nature.
Muilti
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Multi
 national and Huge Organizations enterprises can implement
the
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policies to protect the
environment
. I totally disagree with
this
 statement. the subsequent paragraphs will explain the reason why
i
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 reject the mentioned notion.
To begin
 with,
Environment
 protection is
eveyone's
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everyone's
resposibility
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responsibility
 as individuals. there are questions
how
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 to
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 a role and how to
exexute
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execute
 the process by individuals.
Firstly
, Growing plants by individuals in
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an empty
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place
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places
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 and roadside
area
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areas
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, Each person has to plant some trees yearly.
futhermore
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furthermore
, Parents and school authorities encourage
the
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young persons to the importance of the
environment
. society can run the campaigns in public places like shopping malls and bus and
railways
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 stations.
In addition
 to
this
 people limit
use
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the use
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 of plastic.
Secondly
,
Massess
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Masses
have to adopt bag cloths
instead
 of plastic bags.
environment
 cleaning like backgrounds and public places by using
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dust bins.public should limit
use
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the use
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 of chemicals and pesticides in agriculture. In conclusion,
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the enviornment
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enviornment
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environment
environmental
 should be protected by using
the
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various scientific methods and
thus
redue
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reduce
residue
wastage
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waste
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,
Individual's
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individuals
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 can do
the
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enormous techniques to protect
Environment
.
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