Some people say that the government should stop TV and Newspaper from showing crimes because media coverage of violent crimes is frightening people and encouraging criminals. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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In the present day, with the development of technology, we have been offered several means like TV, the internet,

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to update us about information worldwide.

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the breach scenes is a controversial topic as the violence can be frightening to viewers or

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people to commit crimes. I'm inclined to agree with the mentioned opinion as there is another perspective. I will discuss both opinions in the essay with suitable examples. On the

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hand, human psychology is vulnerable to the brutality shown in programs.

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with, violence often frightens the viewers and affects their peace of mind.

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, the elderly feel depressed and scared after watching an episode of a story containing murder and robbery.

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, If the criminal

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read the detailed description from the newspaper, they would have known the idea to execute a crime by the local authorities.

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, the government should impose a restriction

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such

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brutal acts.

On the other hand

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, some people believe that a clear, informative message is delivered to the young generation through these criminal reports. The horrifying consequences of wrongdoings remind them of not being involved in any offence

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as drug abuse, or alcohol abuse.

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, many cases broadcasted on TV have been explained in crime coverage, which allows viewers to know more about the criminal. Through

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, they can protect themselves

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ones. In conclusion, the violence presented through any mass media has both positive and negative influences on society. From my point of view, the prohibition on

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media coverage does not serve the purpose, though some filters can be applied to make it more effective for people absorbing the information.

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Address the opposing view in more detail to provide a more balanced argument.

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Develop stronger connections between ideas and focus on the logical progression of thoughts within paragraphs and across the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

287 words

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