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Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. However, it is longer the main form of transport. What are the reasons? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population?

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Riding a bike is more beneficial for
environment
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 than other types of transport, yet, going
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anywhere by bike takes a great deal of time.
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this
 transport widely come into play among popularities. Off all the various components which lead to less use of
bicycle
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bicycles
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, one is its weakness in mobility compared to other transporting ways.
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, travelling much faster with buses, cars or metros
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 more convenient for trips within
ciities
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cities
,
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and fast-speed
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 trams and planes are
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more
 time-saving
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 long-distance journeys.
In addition
, as cycling requires physical activity to do, some people don't tend to use bikes to travel daily basis. In order to encourage cycling, providing cyclist-friendly facilities might be the
first
 and foremost step to
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 people make a change.
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, adding cycling
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lines
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 on main roads and cycling tracks in public parks is likely to handle cyclists' safety while they are going through fast-moving vehicles.
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, increasing
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public awareness as to how riding a bicycle has advantages could be
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a second
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 proposition.
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, governments should
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disseminating
disseminate
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programmes
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 about
helpful
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the helpful
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 impacts of cycling, leading to citizens deciding to
adapt
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adopt
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this
 type of travel. In conclusion,
although
inmobility
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immobility
in mobility
 might contribute to the less use of
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the bike
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bike
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bikes
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, supplying
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safety
 and
encourament
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encouragement
of
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 authorities can persuade people to
adapt
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adopt
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with
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 bicycles.
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