In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

However
, with an increase in financial problems in some
countries
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people
may have to
travel
to their own
countries
in the future but I disagree with
this
opinion and I think
people
are finding new ways to make it cheaper.
Although
advertisement has some negative effects , it has some positive effects on customers.
Firstly
it makes competition between companies and they have to do better to gain more market share
thus
sometimes they give a great discount on their services and products
for
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instance, in our
country
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there is a lot of excursion agency which give the best services so
people
have a variety of options to select between them and in
this
occasions company have to give a better option or discount to give more customer so I think it would be helpful for
people
to have a cheaper trip .
Secondly
, I think
people
adapt themselves to the situation so if they can not afford to
travel
by plane they may find another transportation like a ship or bus for their trip
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example , some
people
in my
country
have a foreign trip by car they go to Turkey or Armenia by their car or a bus and
also
for the
last
World Cup they
travel
to Qatar by ship
thus
I think the future is not an exception .
Finally
, with improvement in technology
people
are becoming more knowledgeable
therefore
they like to
travel
to other
countries
to learn about new cultures and taste new foods .
On the other hand
, for some situations like diseases
people
have to
travel
to their
country
such
as during corona pandemic,
people
have to
travel
to their
country
because they were not allowed to
travel
to other
countries
.
Moreover
, with improvements in technology and social -media, it may happen some
people
think it is not important to go to other
countries
when they have great videos and pictures of their beautiful places . In conclusion ,
however
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we have 4k videos and high-quality pictures but I think going to
travel
makes great sense.
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