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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors, engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own. opinion.

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The workplace is an important part of every working person’s life. Some
people
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 say experts (doctors and engineers) must
work
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 in the nation where they did their training
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, whereas others argue that they should be free to
work
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 in any
country
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 they want.
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 essay will look at both these
point
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 of view and argue in
favor
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 of the latter. On the one hand, there is no
sceptioism
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scepticism
 regarding the fact that leaving the
country
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 is the main reason behind the brain drain problem. To make it clear, nowadays many bright brains are moving towards developed countries for high income and better facilities, resulting mother
country
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 not only suffering from
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 of expert workers but
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 facing economical losses.
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, to prevent these losses some individuals are against
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this
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 trend of moving to
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country
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.
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, I don’t think
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 is the right way to prevent
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 kind of
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, it can be tackled by taking some efficient steps by the government.
on the other hand
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, working in a place where we like to
work
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 can provide us
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work
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 fulfilment. To elaborate, If anyone
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work
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works
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 In
a
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 environment or a place they really love to
work
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 they can give their hundred
percent
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 to their
work
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 and reach their high potential
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working which definitely helps to achieve
many
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 success in their life and
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 provide them
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sense of self
satisfactions
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satisfaction
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. In China,
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, most
people
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doing
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 the job they like and
they
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are highly successful
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 their fields. I support
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statements
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statement
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 because
of
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I believe
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 is the only way to achieve
self fulfilment
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 through working. In conclusion,
although
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 some
people
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 think that working in the same
country
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people
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 studied is beneficial for the nation. I personally believe the
significant
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 of working
a
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place where we love to
work
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 is
more
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superior
for
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to
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 our
self happiness
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self-happiness
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 and fulfilment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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