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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors, engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own. opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
The workplace is an important part of every working person’s life. Some
people
 say experts (doctors and engineers) must
work
 in the nation where they did their training
from
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, whereas others argue that they should be free to
work
 in any
country
 they want.
This
 essay will look at both these
point
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points
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 of view and argue in
favor
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 of the latter. On the one hand, there is no
sceptioism
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scepticism
 regarding the fact that leaving the
country
 is the main reason behind the brain drain problem. To make it clear, nowadays many bright brains are moving towards developed countries for high income and better facilities, resulting mother
country
 not only suffering from
shortage
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 of expert workers but
also
 facing economical losses.
Therefore
, to prevent these losses some individuals are against
of
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this
 trend of moving to
new
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a new
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country
.
However
, I don’t think
this
 is the right way to prevent
this
 kind of
problems
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, it can be tackled by taking some efficient steps by the government.
on the other hand
, working in a place where we like to
work
 can provide us
work
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 fulfilment. To elaborate, If anyone
work
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works
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 In
a
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 environment or a place they really love to
work
 they can give their hundred
percent
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 to their
work
 and reach their high potential
of
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working which definitely helps to achieve
many
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 success in their life and
also
 provide them
a
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with a
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sense of self
satisfactions
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satisfaction
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. In China,
for example
, most
people
doing
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 the job they like and
they
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are highly successful
on
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 their fields. I support
this
statements
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statement
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 because
of
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I believe
this
 is the only way to achieve
self fulfilment
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self-fulfilment
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 through working. In conclusion,
although
 some
people
 think that working in the same
country
people
 studied is beneficial for the nation. I personally believe the
significant
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 of working
a
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in a
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place where we love to
work
 is
more
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superior
for
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to
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 our
self happiness
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self-happiness
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 and fulfilment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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