It is better for young people to get advice from old people than young ones. Do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
believe getting
advice
from
elders
is wiser than that from young individuals. While I understand why suggestions from
elders
seem to be more reliable sometimes, I am still of the notion that
advice
from the young would be of greater value in today's world. Admittedly, when asking for the opinion of senior
people
, we are
also
tapping into
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wisdom and experience of them. Having worked and lived for several decades,
elders
can provide abundant experience, tips and methods of both working and living.
This
precious information can help youngsters take
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short-cut and avoid unwanted troubles when dealing with problems.
However
,
advice
from senior members is not always better, especially in modern society where
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technology and
people
's concepts are constantly developing. There is ample evidence that young
people
would be better off
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providing
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, especially
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related to emotional concerns. The reason behind
this
is that the
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gap results in differences in the thinking patterns between
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generations.
For example
, many
olders
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older
elders
believe finding a lover to get
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married
marriage
at a young age is simple since they used to confirm a relationship with their boy or
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by merely just asking, whereas young
people
nowadays have to consider numerous aspects including disparity in cultural, financial and educational backgrounds as well as personality traits, before chasing a boy or a girl.
Therefore
, for
such
issues, young
people
might not be able to acquire useful information from their older relatives or friends.
In addition
, compared to the young,
elders
are less likely to embrace modern inventions most of
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. In fact, it is not unusual to see the use of technological products
such
as tablets, smartphones or gaming controllers have been out of the reach of
people
aged over 70, not to mention advanced knowledge
such
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or coding.
Thus
, it would be better for the young to search for help from their peers if having some questions regarding
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prevailing knowledge. In conclusion,
although
it is true that
advice
from old
people
is
sometime
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better than that from young ones due to their accumulated experience, the young generation can
also
provide valuable suggestions that
elders
may fail to give.
That is
because social development leads to the different thinking patterns and
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between the young and the old and
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the
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fact should not be overlooked.
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