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The media should include more stories which report good news. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#media #stories #report #news
The
information
, which is provided by the
media
 , is a relevant topic in our modern society. One group of
people
 believe that social
media
 should provide more reports, which contain good news. Another part of
people
suppose
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 that the reports ought to be different, not only positive. On the one hand, positive topics in the newspaper could make our society happier, because the material we read has a strong impact on our mood. Satisfied
people
 could make our world better. In
this
 case, the
media
 has a significant influence on us and could be used in different ways.
Furthermore
, the surrounding of contemporary individuals is so depressive, so the
media
 might help with it and give readers more positive topics.
On the other hand
, the main purpose of the
media
 is
providing
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 actual and useful
information
 to readers, so it is not so important whether
this
information
 is positive or not. Our world is not only about positive things, but it
also
 contains unbelievably dramatic stories, which the
media
 should provide to the readers.
For instance
, terror acts
such
 as explosions in the metro
,
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 must be provided by journalists, because it is
type
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 of
information
, which all
people
 should know. To sum up,
from
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 my opinion the main purpose of the
media
to
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 provide relevant and useful
information
 even if it is depressive
ones
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such
 as
terror
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 acts.
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