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The media should include more stories which report good news. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#media #stories #report #news
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The
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, which is provided by the
media
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 , is a relevant topic in our modern society. One group of
people
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 believe that social
media
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 should provide more reports, which contain good news. Another part of
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suppose
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 that the reports ought to be different, not only positive. On the one hand, positive topics in the newspaper could make our society happier, because the material we read has a strong impact on our mood. Satisfied
people
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 could make our world better. In
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 case, the
media
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 has a significant influence on us and could be used in different ways.
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, the surrounding of contemporary individuals is so depressive, so the
media
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 might help with it and give readers more positive topics.
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, the main purpose of the
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 is
providing
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 actual and useful
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 to readers, so it is not so important whether
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information
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 is positive or not. Our world is not only about positive things, but it
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 contains unbelievably dramatic stories, which the
media
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 should provide to the readers.
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, terror acts
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 as explosions in the metro
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 must be provided by journalists, because it is
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 of
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, which all
people
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 should know. To sum up,
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 my opinion the main purpose of the
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to
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is to
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 provide relevant and useful
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 even if it is depressive
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 as
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 acts.
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