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In many countries, people now wear western clothes such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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No one can deny that all over the world new youths are
use
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too
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 wearing western jeans and suits
instead
 of their traditional clothing style. The main reason
are
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behind
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that people
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that person
those people
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 like jeans and suits because they feel comfortable and
relax
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 and
this
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 types of clothes are cheap and affordable for everyone rather than traditional suits are expensive as well I will discuss
positive
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 view in the looming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, nowadays technology is advanced and individuals prefer to wear western outfits due to they are complex and
use
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 too for
this
 development and every
persons
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 are buying jeans now because it is cheaper and
easily
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 to purchase.
Furthermore
, Traditional items are very exhausted today and people don't like
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 because they are old and not attractive
with
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 other
personality
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 and it not suitable for every people in
this
 globe.
For example
, In Japan
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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