In many countries, people now wear western clothes such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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No one can deny that all over the world new youths are
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wearing western jeans and suits
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of their traditional clothing style. The main reason
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behind
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that people
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like jeans and suits because they feel comfortable and
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types of clothes are cheap and affordable for everyone rather than traditional suits are expensive as well I will discuss
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view in the looming paragraphs.
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with, nowadays technology is advanced and individuals prefer to wear western outfits due to they are complex and
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development and every
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are buying jeans now because it is cheaper and
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to purchase.
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, Traditional items are very exhausted today and people don't like
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because they are old and not attractive
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other
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and it not suitable for every people in
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globe.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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