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You work for an international company,and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. write a letter to your manager.in your letter explain why you want to work in the companys hear office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Respected Pritam, Hope you are well. I recently came across a short-term opportunity at
our
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Amazon's corporate head office in Seattle.
Hence
, I would like to request you to provide me approval for
this
 6 months training assignment for the Senior Product Manager program. As you are aware I recently completed my executive MBA at Insead, Singapore and I believe
this
 6 months program setup can provide me with much-needed international exposure, where I can work with multiple stakeholders across different countries.
Moreover
, I think I can utilize my technical & strategic acumen which I will gain from
this
 course and implement it in our local Singapore office when I return.
Hence
, I think
this
 would be mutually beneficial for me
as well as
 for our local organization. I have already completed knowledge transfer to my team members in our Singapore office and
hence
, I strongly believe that they can able to fill my void till I return.
However
, if you need any kind of support, I promise I will try to support you remotely from the US as well.
Hence
, kindly provide me with your approval. Looking forward to a favourable response from you soon. Yours sincerely Ram
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tone
Consider breaking down some of the longer sentences into shorter, clearer ones to improve readability.
response
Mention your plan to manage any potential challenges that might arise during your absence, showing deeper insight.
structure
The letter has a clear structure with a greeting, body, and closing, making it easy to follow.
tone
The tone of the letter is professional and polite, appropriate for a request to a manager.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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