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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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All across the world, there are different
rules
 and regulations for
children
. Somewhere,
parents
 show very strict behaviour towards
children
. They want them to follow
rules
 rather than do everything they desire. While in some areas of the world, offsprings have no restrictions. To my mind, there should be a balance. In countries like Pakistan and India ,
children
 have to follow strict
rules
.
Parents
 give proper attention to the upbringing of their offspring. Now ,in my opinion, it has pros and cons. If a child experience too much restriction, it might make him rigid. He might start hiding things from his
parents
 to enjoy some time of pleasure. If he accidentally commits a crime, he would be afraid to confess. Insofar as a fear of being punished will prevails. In my experience, once in my childhood , an expensive vase was accidentally broken by me. It made me too much afraid. I felt frightened. I was feeling in danger of being scolded. In order to escape from
this
 scenario, I cleaned all the broken pieces and told a lie to my mother. In my view, that one mistake of mine leads me to tell a lie which is worse. But I am
also
 against giving complete freedom to
children
. As I have recently visited abroad, I observed that
children
 are out of control. Some even do not have basic ethics. Once I have seen a teenager of about 18 years. He was drinking alcohol and went out of control. He was not in his senses. An old woman was passing by his side. He started scolding her and that was very bad behaviour.
Such
 type of behaviour must be discouraged. In conclusion,
parents
 should neither be too restrictive nor too lenient.
However
, balance is important. There should be flexibility in
rules
.
Children
 must follow
rules
.But in case, if they fail to follow any
rules
,
parents
 should understand
this
. Because "It is useless to cry over spilt milk" .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upbringing
  • discipline
  • autonomy
  • safety
  • responsibility
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • independence
  • boundaries
  • rebellion
  • holistic development
  • structure
  • nurturing environment
  • behavioral expectations
  • social norms
  • authority
  • decision-making skills
  • consequences
  • respect
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