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In Some Areas Of The US, A Curfew Is Imposed In Which Teenagers Cannot Be Out Of Doors At Night. What’s your opinion?

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It has been observed that some places impose a
curfew
 on teenagers. While it seems unfair and unreasonable to have a
curfew
 for teens, I believe is beneficial for their overall well-being. At the same
time
, some exceptions could be made. There are ample reasons to justify the necessity of
curfew
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.
To begin
 with, it could effectively reduce
youth
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 crime rate. Teens at-risk are likely to join
the
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gang or commit violent acts if they were given the chance. They are likely to have access to illegal subsidence like alcohol and drugs. A lot of crimes or bad
behaviors
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 occur late in the night when parental supervision is not present. The
curfew
 can ensure kids stay out of trouble.
Therefore
 it will stop teens from dangerous activities like that as well as stop young people from being a victim of crime.
Secondly
, students’ general
school
 performance will be boosted.
This
 is because students have more
time
 to focus on
school
 and family. On top of that,
the
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sleeping
time
 will be guaranteed. Negative impacts can be seen in low efficiency and not being able to concentrate in
school
 when sleeping
time
 is not enough.
However
, I believe some exceptions could be made for youngsters.
For example
, if they are late outside for volunteer activities or a
school
 project, they should be able to stay out late in order to finish their tasks.
This
 requires local laws to be flexible. In conclusion, imposing a
curfew
 will protect teenagers from crimes as well as help with their
school
 performance. It should be imposed
although
 it seems like a strict rule.
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