6. In some countries, small town-center shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of town stores, and it may result in an increase in the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?

In recent decades,
people
use more and more
cars
to drive outside of the city to go to larger shops. A hotly debated topic is the pessimist or the benefits are more dominant. From my point of view, I completely agree that the changes have more weaknesses than gains because of some reasons that I mention in
this
essay.
First
and foremost, the usage of
cars
will reduce pressure on the public
transport
system. In
other
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way of saying,
instead
of crowding on public
transport
such
as trains, buses…
people
can comfortably travel by car.
In other words
, public
transport
services are
also
becoming easier to use.
For example
, it usually takes
people
30 minutes to wait for the bus and an extra hour to go to the shopping place, but
people
can save time by just 20 minutes to go to the store by car.
On the other hand
, the air will become more and more polluted if
people
travel in more
cars
. It means that emissions caused by
cars
burning fuel will be released directly into the environment and affect
people
's health.
For instance
, research by Hanoi Nation University in 2021, 45% of emissions in the environment are caused by the usage of
cars
.
Moreover
,
cars
are used a lot causing traffic jams. By that, I mean the usage of
cars
instead
of public
transport
makes the roads more crowded especially the routes from the suburbs to the town centre on the weekend. Let’s consider, in Vietnam, on Saturday or Sunday, the road leading to the city centre of Hanoi is always crowded because
people
go out of the city to shop and return. To jump to conclusion,
people
use more
cars
to go to shops in the out of town centre bring more demerits than merits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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