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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case ? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed ?

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Nowadays, there are lots of possibilities to choose
for
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employees
. Whether to be self-employed or work in a
company
and
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or
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 organization. There are lots of numbers to be self-employed
instead
 of working for a
company
 or organization. There are lots of reasons people choose to be self-employed. The reasons are they have their own authority to arrange their time to go to the office. Later, they could make a new workplace that could help the economic status of their surrounding.
However
, some of the factors could have a bad effect
such
 as the employer should have a savings fund which can help due to emergency conditions
such
 as
disaster
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 or pandemic disease. In my point of view, the reason why people have these preferences is
because
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 they want to be stable on their own terms.
On the other hand
, individuals have contrary reasons
such
 as they have more chances to get several positions than they want to pursue.
Otherwise
, they have to obey the
company
's rules like 7 - 5 hours or any tasks that must be finished directly without any certain working hours or no.
Employees
 must accept their conditions without any hesitation because it
stated
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 on their contract that they have catered.
However
, unpredictable conditions
such
 as mass
layoff
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layoffs
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 should be prepared with
employees
 and might not give a pension from the
company
. All in all, every condition should be prepared with
employees
 either self-employed or
company
-employee. Eventually, the bad condition might happen to both of us without permission.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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