Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the numbers of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A group of society believe that having more
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sports
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facilities will help the population to stay healthy.
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of the public do not consider the prior view adds value in order to live healthily.
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, they think that other practices are required which can help the community to stay fit. In
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essay, I will discuss both sides followed by my opinion. Doing any kind of
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activity will have a major impact on the health of any person but not all society
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able to join a fitness centre because of the affordability and distance to visit it.
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, having more
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of
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sports
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institutes will reduce the cost of transportation. Other
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that,
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crowd
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like to visit fitness centres but because of the bottleneck , the population they do not prefer to visit there. In 2010, the Indian government doubled the sum of recreational centres and it helped to lower the percentage of the crowd who were suffering from obesity.
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, multiple factors can actively contribute to public health
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as air quality, cleanliness and awareness. To exemplify, if a person breathes poor-quality air
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problem related to breathing.
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, hygiene and cleanliness
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play an important role to keep our health in a good condition because neglecting those factors can lead to skin disease.
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, folk should know what kind of food they are eating as well since junk food leaves the majority of
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on deathbeds.
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, Germany has the cleanest air all around the world which helped them to eliminate problems related to the lungs. To conclude, I support the latter view that
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centres are not enough to live a healthy life because a toxic environment can
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make a healthy person sick.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • inclusive fitness
  • public health campaigns
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative health measures
  • health infrastructure
  • wellness initiatives
  • nutritional education
  • health-conscious
  • behavioural change
  • motivational outreach
  • physical wellbeing
  • cross-sectional collaboration
  • government subsidies
  • public health policy
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