When international media (including movies, fashion shows, advertisements and other TV programs) convey the same messages to the global audience, people argue that the expansion of international media has negative impacts on cultural diversity. What is your opinion?

Some people argue that international media often generates negative effects towards cultural diversity. In
this
essay, I will explain why I somehow agree with
this
statement. Focusing
first
on the positive side, movies and dramas can share the international inclusive culture. Nowadays, various
type
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of drama series can be seen in any country, streaming by Netflix or other
servises
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services
.
The romance
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story is one
of
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the popular category in the past and now, but recently, more
charactors
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characters
describe as LGBTQ people.
This
trend definitely
empower
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LGBTQ young
generations
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generation
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.
However
, some international
fashion
brands made a bad impact
to
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on
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overseas young generations. One good illustration is
that
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the famous
fashion
show
conducted in the United States for decades
,
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called
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Victoria's Secret
fashion
events.
The
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Victoria's Secret is one of the mega underwear
brand
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,
demanding
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by a lot of teenagers all over the world. The reason why
this
brand
became
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a
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top of the industry was because of its
fashion
show
. The company choose top models from all over the world for their
show
,
however
, after 2018, a huge argument was provoked. The
show
coodinator
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coordinator
coordinators
tend to choose white-thin-unhealthy girls as their
show
models. Because of
this
, Black, Asian and plus-sized teenagers received the message from the
brand
that they were not the target of
this
brand
. In the end, since 2020,
this
fashion
show
never took place. In conclusion, I believe some international dramas can make a positive impact,
using
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various
charactors
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characters
who have inclusive
background
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backgrounds
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and preferences.
However
, there is a risk of making the international
brand
has
discriminating
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culture if the
brand
does not care about
the
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diversity.
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