When international media (including movies, fashion shows, advertisements and other TV programs) convey the same messages to the global audience, people argue that the expansion of international media has negative impacts on cultural diversity. What is your opinion?

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Some people argue that international media often generates negative effects towards cultural diversity. In

this

essay, I will explain why I somehow agree with

this

statement. Focusing

first

on the positive side, movies and dramas can share the international inclusive culture. Nowadays, various

type

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types

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of drama series can be seen in any country, streaming by Netflix or other

servises

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services

The romance

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Romance

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story is one

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the popular category in the past and now, but recently, more

charactors

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characters

describe as LGBTQ people.

This

trend definitely

empower

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LGBTQ young

generations

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generation

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However

, some international

fashion

brands made a bad impact

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overseas young generations. One good illustration is

that

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the famous

fashion

show

conducted in the United States for decades

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called

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Victoria's Secret

fashion

events.

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Victoria's Secret is one of the mega underwear

brand

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demanding

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by a lot of teenagers all over the world. The reason why

this

brand

became

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at a

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top of the industry was because of its

fashion

show

. The company choose top models from all over the world for their

show

however

, after 2018, a huge argument was provoked. The

show

coodinator

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coordinator

coordinators

tend to choose white-thin-unhealthy girls as their

show

models. Because of

this

, Black, Asian and plus-sized teenagers received the message from the

brand

that they were not the target of

this

brand

. In the end, since 2020,

this

fashion

show

never took place. In conclusion, I believe some international dramas can make a positive impact,

using

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various

charactors

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characters

who have inclusive

background

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backgrounds

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and preferences.

However

, there is a risk of making the international

brand

has

discriminating

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a discriminating

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culture if the

brand

does not care about

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diversity.

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When international media (including movies, fashion shows, advertisements and other TV programs) convey the same messages to the global audience, people argue that the expansion of international media has negative impacts on cultural diversity. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

You want to sell your laptop. You think a friend of yours might like to to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you are selling the laptop Discribe the laptop Suggest a date when your friend can come and see it

The natural resources, such as oil, forests, and fresh water, are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems?

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, many people throw a lot of food from restaurants and shops, why do you think people waste in this way? what can be done to reduce the away of food thrown away?

Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high-rise apartments have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.