Business and Money In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction

There is

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on two

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, some

people

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earn

a huge

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huge salaries

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salaries

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. Some

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think that make

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for

thecountry

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the country

whlies

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while

some

people

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think the

goverment

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government

should have rules to limit

employee's

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employees'

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salaries

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this

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essay will

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discuss both

viwe

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views

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openion

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opinion

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Body paragraph 1

To begin

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, a person who can work hard,

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and earn

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earn

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earns

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a lot of money in order to improve their

lifstlye

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lifestyle

qualities.

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, the

government

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economy-level

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will

be develop

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people

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who earn high

salaries

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, Rich

people

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build companies

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poverty

people

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, that can change poor

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people

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lifestyle

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as well. In

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addition

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government

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the government

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should be given citizens

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free education and standard health care.

Body paragraph 2

On the other hand

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, the

government

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can

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limit

people

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salaries

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while

people

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are not work

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hard.

Futuremore

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Furthermore

people

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who can not work

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the

government

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sector, moved to the private

sectors

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sector

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doctor

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doctors

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engeneer

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engineers

teacher

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teachers

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and moved to the private

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sector

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Besides

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, the

goverment

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government

has faced a lot of

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Conclusion

To sum up,

people

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can earn

a huge

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a huge salary

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salaries

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because it

have

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has

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effected

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effect

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the country. In my opinion,

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the goverment

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goverment

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government

will be found

the

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apply

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taxed from

people

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who earn a lot of money.

Similarly

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, the ministry will start companies and factories as well as give

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job to poor

people

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

216 words

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