In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree?
It is argued that in some nations many men and women develop diseases due to overconsumption of unhealthy
food
. It is important for regulatory bodies to implement this
duty on the specific type of commodity. I, therefore
, believe this
essay agrees with that statement because these specific illnesses such
as obesity and diabetes causes
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cause
the
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apply
health
services too much money and a tax on junk food
would encourage people to improved
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improve
health
.
Nowadays, obesity and diabetes Correct pronoun usage
their health
is
the mother of all diseases from uncontrolled eating of fatty and sugary Correct subject-verb agreement
are
food
. In addition
, this
type of food
is readily accesible
to consumers with a lot to choose Correct your spelling
accessible
with
for its affordable price. Change preposition
from
Moreover
, if the government would imposed
higher taxes on Change the verb form
impose
this
unhealthy commodities it could reduce the Correct determiner usage
these
amount
of citizens patronizing Change the quantifier
number
this
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these
commercialise
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commercialised
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the product
a product
product
and the result would be a healthier nation. Fix the agreement mistake
products
For example
, evidence shows that a tax on sugary drinks that rises prices by 20% can lead to a reduction in consumption of around 20%, thus
preventing obesity and diabetes.
Overconsumption of unhealthy good
leads to get high Fix the agreement mistake
goods
chances
of getting sick and Fix the agreement mistake
chance
therefore
increase visits in
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to
health
facilities. In addition
, if large numbers of population
seek treatment Add an article
the population
on
Change preposition
for
this
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these
specific
related diseases it could cause strain on the government budget. Change the adjective
specifically
Furthermore
, if the state implement
more taxes on these products, consumers tend to refrain from buying Change the verb form
implements
it
and opting to take better Correct pronoun usage
them
food
options thus
preventing serious health
issues. For instance
, Philippines, the previous administration increases tariffs on fatty and sugary goods. This
strategy resulted on
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in
the
decline Correct article usage
a
numbers
of junk Fix the agreement mistake
number
food related
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food-related
ilnesses
visits to the Correct your spelling
illnesses
illness
health
facilities which reduced the burden to
the overall organizational finances.
In conclusion, states should enact Change preposition
on
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a provision
provision
to increase taxes on unhealthy commodities Fix the agreement mistake
provisions
people
will not Correct word choice
so people
be tempt
to purchase Change the verb form
be tempted
it
. As a Correct pronoun usage
them
results
majority will live longer and public funds will be allocated for Fix the agreement mistake
result
onother
more important issues.Correct your spelling
other
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