In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree?

It is argued that in some nations many men and women develop diseases due to overconsumption of unhealthy

food

. It is important for regulatory bodies to implement

this

duty on the specific type of commodity. I,

therefore

, believe

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essay agrees with that statement because these specific illnesses

such

as obesity and diabetes

causes

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the

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apply

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health

services too much money and a tax on junk

food

would encourage people to

improved

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health

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their health

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. Nowadays, obesity and diabetes

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the mother of all diseases from uncontrolled eating of fatty and sugary

food

.

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,

this

type of

food

is readily

accesible

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accessible

to consumers with a lot to choose

with

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for its affordable price.

Moreover

, if the government would

imposed

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higher taxes on

this

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unhealthy commodities it could reduce the

amount

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of citizens patronizing

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commercialise

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product

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and the result would be a healthier nation.

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, evidence shows that a tax on sugary drinks that rises prices by 20% can lead to a reduction in consumption of around 20%,

thus

preventing obesity and diabetes. Overconsumption of unhealthy

good

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leads to get high

chances

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of getting sick and

therefore

increase visits

in

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health

facilities.

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, if large numbers of

population

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seek treatment

on

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this

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specific

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related diseases it could cause strain on the government budget.

Furthermore

, if the state

implement

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more taxes on these products, consumers tend to refrain from buying

it

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and opting to take better

food

options

thus

preventing serious

health

issues.

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, Philippines, the previous administration increases tariffs on fatty and sugary goods.

This

strategy resulted

on

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the

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decline

numbers

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of junk

food related

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food-related

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ilnesses

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illnesses

illness

visits to the

health

facilities which reduced the burden

to

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the overall organizational finances. In conclusion, states should enact

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provision

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to increase taxes on unhealthy commodities

people

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will not

be tempt

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to purchase

it

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them

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. As a

results

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majority will live longer and public funds will be allocated for

onother

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other

more important issues.