Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime?
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crime
done by young people is increasing Use synonyms
most
parts of the world. The origin of Change preposition
in most
this
situation Linking Words
stem
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stems
while
several solutions can solve the problem. Linking Words
Major
factor can be Correct article usage
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to earn money easily in Change preposition
about how
short
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a short
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of time
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result
in major crimes which Change the verb form
results
includes
theft and burglary and Change the verb form
include
cause
harm to someone innocent. Another cause is bad Wrong verb form
causing
behavior
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behaviour
surrounding
has a huge impact on whether they will be a good citizen or not. A third factor is Replace the word
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overuse
of social media and Correct article usage
the overuse
fear
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the fear
miss
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that
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the
society. Adolescent tends to copy each other and do things they underestimate the consequence. Turning to Correct article usage
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initial
step would be to support young people to do Add an article
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an
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teenagers
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crime
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crimes
such
as theft and burglary. If we took Linking Words
this
step, it would reduce the Linking Words
crime
rate and most importantly parents would try to behave differently in of their children, because Use synonyms
fear
of their children committing Change preposition
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crime
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crimes
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Finally
, teenagers should cut down total hours that spending on social media and try not to Linking Words
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be persuaded
effect
which can lead Fix the agreement mistake
effects
unexpected
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to unexpected
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crime
or wrong actions. In summary, the factors of society and other people’s impact Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
appears
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appear
main
causes. So help of Correct article usage
the main
lot
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite