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An E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of using e-mail outweigh the advantages?

#e-mail #impact #communication
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human
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crucial for
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professional and social
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, there are many positive and negative
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. To commence with, in the present, using
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,
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. To explain it, many do
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 hackers hacked the hospital data by using
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 and they did
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on the other hand
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email
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 as compared to
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. So, companies major prefer to
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 of employers use
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MNC companies and people send pdf,
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 and many more secure data by using
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email
 so there are many advantages of
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. In conclusion, there are many
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of
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 data and many more.
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