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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is currently a contentious argument advocating that much time is devoted to teaching the facts
instead
 of focusing on hands-on experience in all phases of learning, whether it is school or college. Personally, I completely agree with
this
 view and in
this
 essay, I will express my opinion on it. The
first
 reason why I advocate for
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practical exposure is that it plays a vital role in training progress.
This
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 understanding and help
students
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education
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 the ones who read it.
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 of practical lessons might lead to ineffective academic results. Another justification for why I believe practical skills are indispensable at all levels of
education
 is that they are important to the future work of several pupils. Indeed, undergraduate
students
 are trained in a self-studying approach
instead
 of practical lessons, which causes a negative consequence that many
students
 lack social skills essential to their future job.
For instance
, after graduation, many
students
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job interviews because they had never been instructed about
this
 practical skill before.
As a result
, the best way to fill the gap between knowledge in university and the practical situation is by learning experiment lectures. In conclusion, I strongly agree that
students
 at all levels of
education
 are learned theoretical classes more than practical classes, which leads to a lack of necessary skills for higher training or job performance in the future. It is advisable that schools should increase practical exposure to reach a more effective
education
 system.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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