Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?

A growing number of people are of the view that pupils do not have proper knowledge about the work due to which its’ a school responsibility to make
children
have a short-term job along with having their daily school routine. From my perspective, that experience has plenty of upsides which will be outlined below. The
first
argument in favour of the opinion that I support is that having a job which a pupil is thought to choose in the
future
may show all the drawbacks it has in the initial stages so it is a great chance for a child to think about the other fields of work.
For example
, there are some situations when a person is forced by parents to choose a certain field of study
which
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a student may not be interested in. Undeniably, having
such
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at schools helps to prevent
burnouts
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and disappointments in the
future
among
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employees as well as people can think carefully about their career choice. The
second
argument in favour of
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view is the fact that school graduates usually do not have enough relevant life experience to be sure
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the speciality they want to study at universities.
For instance
, pupils need a gap year to become wiser to make the right career choice.
Furthermore
, it may bring different issues
such
as having debts or
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thinking about
future
education.
Therefore
, intending a short time working will be
useful
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tool for
children
to help them make, possibly, the most important choice in their lives. To conclude, there are some who believe that having a short-term work experience at
schools
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is essential for
children
. I am totally convinced that it is
really
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perspective
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idea which would be vital for
children
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future
.
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