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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the cause? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Everybody in their life comes across the decision of buying or renting a
house
. It is irrefutable that buying a
house
 is an important step for people around the world,
instead
 of renting a place. In
this
 essay, I will put forward some supporting points with common examples.
To begin
 with, buying a
house
 refers to investing in an asset, whereas renting will be an expense to live in a
house
. To illustrate, If
one
 pays $2000 to rent for a month, it is something he is not going to get back, but paying the same amount as monthly interest while staying in
a
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 owned
house
 by putting some down payment seems like a better option.
Moreover
, renting is important if
one
 can not afford a
house
 and needs time to save before buying
one
.
In addition
, renting comes with a lot of restrictions around modifications in the
house
, while in
a
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an
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 owned property you can do any kind of renovation that you like. To exemplify
further
, painting the walls of a
house
 needs to be done by the owner and not the tenant, so the
color
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 of the wall is
also
 decided by the same person.
Thus
, leaving tenants with minimum power to make changes around the
house
, and can be asked to vacate if they do so without
a
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permission
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. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that buying a
house
instead
 of renting
one
 has its own perks.
Therefore
, in my
opinion
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 It is
advantagious
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advantageous
 to buy a
house
then
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than
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renting
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rent
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one
,
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 if you can afford to do so financially.
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