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people who live in large cities are a range of problems in their daily life what are the main problems people in cities face and how can these problem be lacked

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plenty of
people
 moved from villages to big
cities
 for reasons
such
 as, to find opportunities for better
jobs
.
people
 have to face several common problems living in big
cities
. some
people
 think big
cities
 are the place to get opportunities for better
jobs
. but those
people
 perhaps have facing several problems for, example, the expensive cost of leaving, many
people
 realize the expense in the city is higher than in villages.
such
 as the daily needs, foods
also
 rent.
this
 cost possibility twice folds compare with the villages. because of
this
people
 choose
jobs
 with well-paid or part-time
jobs
besides
 the main
jobs
 and arrange the expenditure properly.
moreover
, is a traffic jam, and developing
cities
 are identical to traffic jams.
this
 problem leads to stress for some residents in the city. to avoid
people
 often using public transportation
such
 as the bus or underground train
nevertheless
, that crowded. the
last
 is the pollution, lack of trees and CO2 generated by vehicles in
cities
 cause contamination of the air that can risk health, and the government need to the observation of these problems. in summary, agile development in big
cities
 makes
people
 who live and work in that environment have to prevent the mentality and physical properly
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