Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?

,Well it is an undeniable fact that living in
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contemporary epoch each and every human
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are habitual of something in regular
timeand
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time and
tobacco is
main
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thing to consume by pupils and they love to do it whilst few individuals
belive
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that eating
such
kind of things can be very
harmfull
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harmful
for society and because of
this
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reason
it should be
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banned in whole world and shag is one type of drugs . In fact , I fully agree
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with
the above sentence to say no to not only
tobbaco
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tobacco
but
also
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products
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which are bad for life . I would like to give my views and opinion in the
further
paragraph .
First
and
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, eating
such
things can affect our body and make some strong
disases
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diseases
inside veins .
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, a lot of
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not only eat snuff but
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also
smoke
which
cause
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cancer and it
also
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on
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the person who is standing
near by
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.
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, many
countries
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goverment
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governments
say yes to
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smoke
outside in
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area
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.
Nonetheless
, using cigarettes can
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the non-smoker who
are
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living in
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smoke
area
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like
workplace
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,
house
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and other places can cause breathing
problem
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problems
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. By way of illustration , 60% of
Indian
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population
smoke
in public residence and ample
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people seems fetal death every year .
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we seldom give a thought to
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ponder
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side of the essay ,
myriad
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of
man
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men
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/woman protest against
smokkers
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smokers
and crop
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companies
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.
Moreover
, each single companies
who
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manufacture
this things
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clearly mention the
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harmful
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in
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wrapper
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of
product
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thenalso
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then also
beings like to have it and they say they enjoy it .
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,
plethora
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of doctor
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their
pateints
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patients
to
devor
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devour
tobbaco
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tobacco
as it is
also
medicine for some
disease
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diseases
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.
Last
but not the least , the
benift
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benefit
benefits
of avoiding
smokking
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smoking
can help to solve
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problem and it cleans our
enviornment
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environment
in
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way . To cite an example , as per
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article published in " THE HUFFINGTON POST" every nation
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strict
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rule
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to ban
such
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packages
and they imagine that by 2030
earth
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will be
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by
such
evolution and technology . In the end , I
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, it is
right
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of every citizen to
they
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own
minset
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mindset
but they should
also
think about nature because it
give
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people oxygen to live a
beatiful
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beautiful
life . I would argue that government should take proactive measures against makers and stop to have
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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