Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Researchers have concluded that inherent factors we are born with are more important than
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we live in after we are born. In my opinion, experiences in our lives play a more important role than
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characteristics we are born with. In
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of all, all sorts of events that happened to us would influence our personalities dramatically.
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, a boy is born
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a harsh family, where he gets abused by his parents, and when he goes to school, he gets bullied in his class.
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, we can easily imagine that his personality would be affected, he will
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live in hatred without a doubt.
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, I believe personality is more influenced by the world around us, namely,
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, when we try to learn something,
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as sports and arts, we often improve our skills
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practice, which cannot be brought by our inherent nature. Practice makes perfect, through practice, we get various kinds of feedback from the world around us.
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, we can find out our weaknesses and thereby we can improve
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to say, the world around us plays an important role in our development. In conclusion,
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what I would like to say differs from researchers' discoveries and their points of view, I believe that the environment in
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we live and our own personal efforts weigh more on our personality and development. We should focus on things that we can control rather than those we cannot.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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