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Describe your overall study experience at this university and let us know what worked and what didn’t.

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My experience at
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 University was, overall, a very positive one. I gained a great deal of knowledge that has made it possible for me to progress toward my goals. after obtaining my degree I have opened a gateway towards professional employment and career development. By learning skills
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 as leadership, time management ، Crisis Management ، and team working I have been able to prove that I can take on jobs as a Mid-level manager in companies.
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 unfortunately, because of academy policy, the students were not able to take an internship during the semester, so we could not test our knowledge in
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 until after graduation.
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, one of my biggest concerns was that, If I want to emigrate to another country how
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 of my knowledge about management is international
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 , I always try to be updated, in order
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classes and learning for
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. simultaneously I participate in various workshops and conferences
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held by the university and it was
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 big opportunity for me. Overall, the university has had a very positive impact on my life and on my development both personally and professionally. Truly, I really missed for educational institution atmosphere and
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 being on campus or attending class again.
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