Eating a balanced diet is the most important factor for a healthy life. To what extent do you agree?
Many people argue that the key to a healthy lifestyle is to consume equal portions of
food
every day. This
essay completely agrees with this
view, as the human body requires a variety of nutrients, which are delivered from the diet. However
, the complete exclusion of a specific type of food
source may lead to an alteration of normal physiology, therefore
, a balance in eating is obligatory.
Firstly
, it is a well-known fact that every piece of food
consists of 3 main macronutrients-carbohydrates, fats, and proteins, in addition
, all of these supplements are essential sources of energy for the organism. This
is to say that, in order that
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operates
properly, every single day we should provide those resources. Correct subject-verb agreement
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Moreover
, each macronutrient undergoes further
degradation to a micronutrient, which is of crucial importance for the process of absorption (when minerals, vitamins and electrolytes are transferred into the bloodstream from the food
). For example
, some of the amino acids which are forming the skeleton of each cellular membrane could be delivered only with food
, however
, in order that
them to be extracted accurately, everything should be balanced.
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Secondly
, if we totally remove some specific type of food
from our diets, it can harm our well-being by causing different diseases. In fact, most of the current cardiovascular disorders are one result of a non-balanced diet. By doing so, we force our body to function in an abnormal way, as it is trying to derive all of the nutrients needed. For instance
, our brain cells need carbohydrates in order that
they function normally, Correct word choice
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conversely
, if we decide to exclude completely
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will make our body start producing the so-called ‘ketone bodies’- products which are produced from the liver so they can replace the missing nutrients. Moreover
, the exquisite production of these ketone products may lead to a life-threatening condition called’ ketoacidosis’.
In conclusion, there is a strong bond between a healthy life and a balanced diet, therefore
, in my opinion, we should all try to follow the advice given by diabetologists so we can achieve more proportional habits in our nutrition.Submitted by dimitrovkonstantin92 on
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