You eat at your college cafeteria at lunch time every day.. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved Write at least 150 words. Begin your letter as follows: Dear __________

Dear Mr Fring, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
letter in concern with some suggestions I have for the improvement of the cafeteria on campus. Even though the cafeteria is a bit far from my department, I enjoy eating lunch there every day. I am extremely fond of the idea of rotating
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every week, which makes eating at the cafe exciting.
Moreover
, I love the taste of several cuisines especially Italian and Indian.
Also
, It is very thoughtful of you to have a separate section for vegetarian people, as some of us do not consume meat.
However
,
college
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the college
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has increased the intake of students
this
semester and
as a result
, we are seeing more litter on the floor these days and there's an urgent need to fix it. I have
few
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a few
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suggestions that might be helpful in resolving
this
issue. We can increase the number of trash cans in the area, as overfilling of the dustbin is a major cause.
Also
, we can increase the number of
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attendants
who can remove the trash bag if it is full. I appreciate it in advance for accepting my suggestions. I can't wait to hear from you. Yours faithfully. Vimal Thakkar
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